by 222333 » Sun Oct 05, 2014 11:35 pm
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I have split the story.
I have posted my new bit in the back-to-I's- place path.
I have copied my bit in the Park path. You can copy yours now - only, I think that in mine I have written that they are walking side by side, so perhaps "from behind her" does not fit?
About the Clean Copy, I'll leave it to you to make whatever you deem appropriate, so that you can have full access to it.
And about Lucy's heart being in danger... you know, I never thought of that. Now I see it's... evident. But while writing my paragraphs, I was only thinking of her re-considering her life, no romantic ideas about Vincent. It's almost magical how words have their own power and personality, isn't it?
Ciao,
S
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I have split the story.
I have posted my new bit in the back-to-I's- place path.
I have copied my bit in the Park path. You can copy yours now - only, I think that in mine I have written that they are walking side by side, so perhaps "from behind her" does not fit?
About the Clean Copy, I'll leave it to you to make whatever you deem appropriate, so that you can have full access to it.
And about Lucy's heart being in danger... you know, I never thought of that. Now I see it's... evident. But while writing my paragraphs, I was only thinking of her re-considering her life, no romantic ideas about Vincent. It's almost magical how words have their own power and personality, isn't it?
Ciao,
S